I wrote a short story. Here it is:
http://www.hotlinkfiles.com/files/19298 ... otnet1.doc
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Short story I wrote
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Whoa!!! That's Cool
Ehm... Maybe i'm overreacting
try to make it longer, make the details (like describing the crater) and create the story interval between crash and working in the restaurant. kinda... :
____then the humanoid walks couple miles to the nearest city. when he enters the city every people in there is looking at him, some scared, some are surprised. the humanoid walk at the center of the road with hanging wires and aspilling liquid that looks like an artificial blood. then he enters a restaurant. everybody in that restaurant was so scared, they stand still. then the robot talks to the manager. (then a conversation supposed to be here, i have no time to think what the conversation is)
Well it will replace the second paragraph after that startup...
but is that 's cool is it? 8)
ps: sorry if my english is bad.
Ehm... Maybe i'm overreacting
try to make it longer, make the details (like describing the crater) and create the story interval between crash and working in the restaurant. kinda... :
____then the humanoid walks couple miles to the nearest city. when he enters the city every people in there is looking at him, some scared, some are surprised. the humanoid walk at the center of the road with hanging wires and aspilling liquid that looks like an artificial blood. then he enters a restaurant. everybody in that restaurant was so scared, they stand still. then the robot talks to the manager. (then a conversation supposed to be here, i have no time to think what the conversation is)
Well it will replace the second paragraph after that startup...
but is that 's cool is it? 8)
ps: sorry if my english is bad.
Okay, I've "finished" the zequel. It's just a rough copy, and needs some polishing, but since I'm not going to see my english teacher for a while (4 day weekend) I decided to let you guys see it.
Stephen Chilcote and the Stephinians.docx
Stephen Chilcote and the Stephinians.docx
[schilcote] It doesn't have to be good, it just has to not be "wow is that the only thing you could think of" bad